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The Sharpening.

Writing-craft coaching sessions, kept honest — the technique, why it works, and what to try next.

Jul 19, 2026·6 min

Total Eclipse: Rehearsing the Uncanny Before It Arrives

Four paragraphs, three registers, one buried avalanche: how Dillard opens Total Eclipse by braiding cosmic dread against flat procedural fact, then spends the whole passage quietly rehearsing the eclipse itself before it happens.

from Annie Dillard, Total Eclipse (opening) — Anna's transcription, 7/29/26
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Jul 15, 2026·3 min

Anchoring a World in One Symbol

One recurring symbol can carry a whole cosmology without exposition — how Jemisin anchors The Killing Moon's world in the moon itself, compresses culture into a single subordinate clause, and lets tenderness collide with ritual violence to do the emotional work a paragraph of explanation never could.

from N.K. Jemisin, The Killing Moon (Chapter One)
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Jul 15, 2026·6 min

The Apocalypse Is the Point — Line Edit

A full line edit of 'The Apocalypse Is the Point,' now covering all three parts, distilled into thirteen reusable techniques and one dominant theory insight — you build precise, sensory momentum and then release the tension early with a soft abstraction, right when the concrete image should be left to stand on its own.

from Perplexity Space line-edit sessions on The Apocalypse Is the Point — full essay, Part I and Parts II–III (three PDF exports, two of which were duplicates of the same II–III conversation)
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